User blog comment:MrPacheco101/A Devil Rides In Kyoto: Jonah Hex & Himura Kenshin/@comment-4484220-20121112200431

Truly one of the best battles on this wiki written by one of the best (and in many people's opinions, THE best) authors here. This lengthy epic was well worth the wait. I could tell just by reading that a lot of care was taken into writing the dialog for each character. I must say I don't know much about Jonah Hex, so I can't evaluate how well you represented him, but I was without a doubt pleased with your representation of Kenshin Himura. I really liked how you were able to describe in words the way in which Kenshin moves with inhuman speed, true to how it looks in the anime. And of course, your detailed descriptions of all the blood and gore really added to the drama. Sorry to play parakeet, but this is definitely getting my vote for Battle of the Month, and will likely get the same for Battle of the Year until further notice.

Overall: 9/10

Why 9/10 and not 10/10? That, Pach, is entirely my fault, and not yours. You see, the way I am with my own personal taste of battles on wiki is wanting to see two warriors fight each other. Connecting their universes with a considerably long backstory is nice, but making it extensively long to the point where it takes really long to read the whole thing is a bit overwhelming at times. I'm not saying I don't like it being long, but not extremely long. My preferred length is about your average Drayco battle. Now by no means whatsoever am I saying that your extremely long length is bad, nor do I discourage you to do what you did in future battles, but I am among a certain audience that is a little bit overwhelmed, and just think stuff like those soldiers showing up and interrupting the fight was just unnecessary and made it take longer to read the battle whilst taking time away from reading what I came to read: two specific warriors fighting each other in a one-on-one battle. Please note that this is just my personal opinion. I do not ask anyone to agree with me, and I can easily see how some would disagree, and I'm not even saying what you did didn't make the battle better for a lot of audiences. But in my personal opinion, making a battle long makes it good, but making it too long can bog it down a little.

...So, sorry to ruin the moment, but if you are open to this kind of thing like you were on chat some months ago, then I have some typos to report. First, I'll say that throughout the whole thing, you are inconsistent between whether you're typing in past tense or present tense. As for specific areas:

"Its' robust dark wooden frame sails..." (relevant)

"I want that man to suffer slowly and painfully as possible for bringing my family such sorrow!and grief..." "Hex’s ears twitches as he hear several pairs of footsteps coming towards his direction..." "Hex knew with the little information given ,the intricate alleyways..."

"representing their ALLGIENCE to the infamous Shisengumi corps." "then I'll cut you where you stand in the name of The Tokugawa government !" "It seems like ages since I have found a time to rest my blade for a long time(peroid should go here) A time for peace maybe?" "Whose there!?" (relevant) "Kenshin soon finds himself laying against his formerly deceased wife lap as she begins to brush his hair lightly." "Kenshin suddenly feels an extremly sharp from the rear of his shoulder as the small chunks of red flesh flies out."

"Hex eye's widen as he sees..." "knocking him back and dropping his gun his gun in the process." "releasing small shards DEP inside his flesh." "Hit me below anything anything vital..."

"over and over and over again with neither one of them is giving in."

"Hex said is disbelief as he found himself completly surrounded." "it was fate that these two WIL manage to see each other once again..." "Feeling so far away, The spearman picks up his speed..." "Hahaha you still cease to amaze Battousai!" "Hajime quickly counters by swing his blade to the side of Kenshin's head..." "He then manages to turns his head and see Jonah Hex..." Just so you know, I am not claiming I could do better, just thought you might be open to this kind of stuff since you appreciated this on chat some months back.