User blog comment:Mrweare121/The mario brothers vs Donkey kong and Diddy kong/@comment-2149911-20130222050657/@comment-422690-20130222160041

Pretty much what Pach said, though I'd add some things. Not only are the duos incredibly out of character, you tried to give a reason for the fight which fell flat, since it went nowhere. Try to be closer to the canon characterizations of the warriors, as well as taking the attempt at story farther. If you don't want to have a cohesive story, don't try to start with one.

Also, type this in Word first. Spellcheckers are useful.

And if you want to try to be "edgy" and "dark", be a better writer first. Right now, it just feels like you're trying too hard and that makes it funny rather than grim.